Who can help me to correct my article...

Posted by Flitteroliva on 2007/4/14 22:47:41

想請有沒有人幫我看看有沒有＂文法錯誤＂ｏｒ不必要的＂贅句＂，因為字數太多了，想刪掉約20個字
thank u very very much ...
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Judging from my own experience, I am convinced that the aged are an indispensable part for our society.


Every morning, the happiest matter is that I hear my grandmother’ smiling and cheerful voice while opening my sleepy eyes, because I realize that means I will enjoy excellent breakfast she prepares for our family specifically. Then, grandmother watches us go to dissimilar destination for pursuing education or working and we all set our mind at ease to trust the house to her for we know she can attend to everything very well, including domestic chores or home environment so that the house is always the extremely comfortable and relaxing place to refresh and warm our body and mine. At this point in time, I literally believe it is a perfect event to own a grandmother.


She is not healthy and vigorous as well as youngsters; nevertheless, she has more spare time to express solicitude to other people or she frequently provides some useful advises by past experiences to handle troubles which younglings have never encountered . Then, through the interaction, the history of human can inherit and progree. So, I think the aged are really like priceless treasure to everyone.