Re: please check my paragraph and sentence~~

Posted by glotynn on 2007/11/7 16:27:32

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In conclusion, in order to keep up with the pace of the times, good command of English is very important in a career. I think I can make use of English to advance my create advantage for my future career. Besides, I can most close it can help me to get closer to the whole world in the future. I wish to use what I have learned for in my future career and to strengthen my competitive ability competitiveness advantage with on others.

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1. Therefore, English can help me make more competitive increase my competing power in my future career.

2. Due to the trend of internationalization nowadays, and the second language has become a necessary an essential ability in life.


that's These are the errors my teacher pointed out my error in my homework. has Can anybody can correct it them for me? Thanks ...


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Hope it helps.