Re: Please help me revise...........

Posted by Tim Luo on 2008/1/22 23:36:07
Jun,

I would just try adding a few words to make it smoother.

I am Yi-Chun, brought up in a family of nine members, (they are) father, mother, sister, two brothers, a sister-in-law, two nephews and me. My father is a farmer. My mother is a housewife.

Tim

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