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Posted by chdboy on 2011/2/15 12:11:29

IELTS
Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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In the present age,international sporting(World Cup etc.) is very popular. Some people think that it could ease tensions among countries and release emotions in a safe way.

This viewpoint maybe true. Although, peace and development have became mainstream thoughts of today, partial conflicts are also constant and common. And,as far as I know, these conflicts are practically result from mutual misunderstand. Thus , strengthening interaction and mutual understand are indispensable for each country. For example, the Olympic Games is a large-scale sports meeting of the world and, in many cases, every country must send several delegates and brilliant athletes to take part in. For them, Olympic creates an opportunity to communicate. By now, “one world, one dream” has became a well-known slogan as a whole. In addition, patriotic emotions widely exists in most of the nations, which provide a sense of belonging to nationals. Seriously, we should treat this emotions critically and lead it to a right trend. Otherwise, it would become nationalism even ,in a worst situation,terrorism. Surely, this kind of emotions can be released via athletic activities. If one team win a race, not only would they gain honor and a sense of achievement, but also it is a glory for the nation they come from.

However, Some aspects against this opinion. Specifically, it could not ease international tensions, although it makes an opportunity for countries to interact. Some international issues are so quite complex that no possible to be solved in a short time. Admittedly, international sport is a safe way for releasing patriotic emotions as the above said. But, unfortunately, We can often see some unpleasant matters happen in such significant occasions, such as quarrel and fight. So, the practical effect of international sport is doubtfully.

In conclusion, as international activities, athletic meetings could strengthen friendship among player who come from different countries, although it maybe unrealistic for solving national conflicts, practically, they provide a possibility and a stage for participating countries to communicate. For another, some unpleasant matters occur at times indeed, but, sports meeting is still an ideal way for express patriotic emotions. In fact, it is impossible for everything is flawless. Overall, my opinion is , international sporting occasions are useful in easing tensions among countries and releasing patriotic emotions safely.

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