Hello Everybody,

There are some errors in the following two writings. Would you like to help me revise the mistakes? Looking forward to having you guys' notions. Thank you!


(One)
The Whites have a couple of children. They live in Los Angeles. One of the children, Mary, a seniior high school student. She wants to be a nurse in somdays. The other is Joe. He studies in junior high school. He wants to produce motorcycles in seven years.

(Two)
Mr. and Mrs. White have two children. Mary is a senior high school student. She wants to be a nurse. Joe is a junior high school student. He wants to go to the factory work, because he would like to have his own motorcycle. They both have opinion of their future.

Rachel, will I win a trip to Hawaii?

Apex, come on! Virtue is its own reward! A nice guy like you, will never ask for anything by helping people, right?

The Whites have a couple of children. They live in Los Angeles. One of the children, Mary, a [senior] high school student, wants to be a nurse [some day] while her brother, Joe, who is still in junior high school, wants to ["produce???"] have/make his own brand of motorcycle in seven years.

The Whites couple and their two children live in Los Angeles. One of the children, Mary, a [senior] high school student, wants to be a nurse [some day] while her brother, Joe, who is still in junior high school, wants to ["produce???"] have/make his own brand of motorcycle in seven years.

Rachel, I guess somebody likes you, they registered today just to correct your sentences for you. I know who you'll take to Hawaii now...... :(

Good job with good correction, sspuds.

"The Whites have a couple of children" doesn't seem right, because "The Whites" refers to the whole family, and not only Mr. and Mrs. White.

Hi sspuds,
Thanks for the excellent correction! As Glotynn said, "Good job!" And would you please try to revise the second one as well?


Apex......
aiyo......please don't scare our new friend away!! Btw, you won't correct the errors for me until i promise a trip to Hawaii, will you? Please don't ask a poor o-ba-sun to offer such a big reward lah!

Haha Rachel, me? scare people away? I thought I attract people...and you are the one who.....nevermind, I don't want to get in trouble with you again. I remember last time I had to hide for two weeks. Really, I was going to correct those sentences for you, but as you can see, I talked too much and someone beat me to it.

The second one still no one to revise it. Thank you !!