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Judging from my own experience, I am convinced that the aged are an indispensable part Every morning, the happiest She is not so healthy and vigorous as Remarks: 1) matter是不好的事情, 故改為thing. 2) smiling voice意思與cheerful voice重複, 故以kind代之. 3) open為瞬間動詞, 用when. 4) so that the house is always the extremely comfortable and relaxing place 注意so that是因果邏輯用法, 你在此使用so that, 成了trust的邏輯, 但"the extremely comfortable and relaxing place"是attend的直接結果, 故改為"making it the extremely comfortable and relaxing place..." 5) 注意not so...as的用法. 6) 前為負面語意, 後為正面語意時, 用however; 反之, 用nevertheless. 7) Through the interaction, the history of mankind can inherit and progress. 這個意旨太巨大了, 你想減少字數就刪這個.
Posted on: 2007/4/15 18:31
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Oh...
very useful advices to me ^ ^ thanks!
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Wow講解的好詳細. Thank you uncle glot.
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Hi Flitteroliva,
I feel happy that my suggestions could be of some help to you. By the way, your sentence: "At this point in time, I literally believe it is so perfect to own a grandmother." can also be written as follows: At this point in time, I believe that having her as my grandmother is literally a blessing.
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ha..
The sentence becomes more "beautiful"!!!
Posted on: 2007/4/16 22:40
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