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Re: 英文履歷與範例 [by CarmenCear]

Mon, 26 Sep 2016 14:33:10 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: 英文履歷與範例
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Re: I need help!! Could you, please, revise my Personal Statement!! :) [by Tim Luo]

Wed, 16 Apr 2008 00:06:16 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: I need help!! Could you, please, revise my Personal Statement!! :)
Marian,

Quite a long article for most to read. Basically only a few people here are native speakers of English, so there's no need to specify this part. Your article is quite well-written, thus I will only give some pointers.

[Paragraph Two]
Since obtaining a Master's degree in graduate study....., I do not want to make compromises on the quality of my education. On account of that I researched extensively,.... The information gathered was good enough to understand...

[Paragraph Three]
It has piqued my interest... my inclination towards business began from an early age.... I began to assist him in dealing with family business and accompanied him to business meetings.....
to selling jewellery/jewelry,....
I believe these were extremely useful and serve as insightful experiences into the world of business.

I will continue with the remaining parts later. Besides, I recommend you making some of the details shorter. For example, you might just say "how he conducted his business (activities)" instead of "how he was working, talking with colleagues and negotiating.

Tim

Re: please give some comments about my toefl writing [by new211]

Tue, 25 Mar 2008 14:54:41 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: please give some comments about my toefl writing
Hi, Tim

thank you very much!

Sharon

Re: Please help me revise........... [by Tim Luo]

Tue, 22 Jan 2008 23:36:07 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: Please help me revise...........
Jun,

I would just try adding a few words to make it smoother.

I am Yi-Chun, brought up in a family of nine members, (they are) father, mother, sister, two brothers, a sister-in-law, two nephews and me. My father is a farmer. My mother is a housewife.

Tim

Re: Please help me revise my personal statement [by Rony]

Wed, 9 Jan 2008 17:45:29 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: Please help me revise my personal statement
the last line: United State ——〉 United States

Re: Plz give me some suggestion! [by Tim Luo]

Thu, 8 Nov 2007 11:31:33 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: Plz give me some suggestion!
Carollin,

The following are some pointers for you.

1. visited to many beautiful places

2. I think tourism is a field ~~which is~~ full of challenges and ~~interesting~~ fun

3. The work~~ing~~ quality and environment attracted me a lot.

4. the tourism and recreation industries have

5. I ~~promoted~~ polished up on the four skills of listening, speaking, reading, and writing.

6. I emphasized on my Japanese learning
(but you should better rewrite this part to make it more sensible)

7. Having good language abilities, I believe I can bring my vantages into full play in this field.
(better rewrite this sentence too)

Tim

Re: please check my paragraph and sentence~~ [by glotynn]

Wed, 7 Nov 2007 16:27:32 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: please check my paragraph and sentence~~
-Paragraph-
In conclusion, in order to keep up with the pace of the times, good command of English is very important in a career. I think I can make use of English to ~~advance my~~ create advantage for my future career. Besides, ~~I can most close~~ it can help me to get closer to the whole world in the future. I wish to use what I have learned ~~for~~ in my future career ~~and~~ to strengthen my ~~competitive ability~~ competitiveness advantage ~~with~~ on others.

-Sentence-
1. Therefore, English can help me ~~make more competitive~~ increase my competing power in my future career.

2. Due to the trend of internationalization nowadays, ~~and~~ the second language has become ~~a necessary~~ an essential ability in life.

~~that's~~ These are the errors my teacher pointed out ~~my error~~ in my homework. ~~has~~ Can anybody ~~can~~ correct it them for me? Thanks ...

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Hope it helps.

Re: This is my autobiology~ [by futari]

Mon, 29 Oct 2007 10:20:54 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: This is my autobiology~
Excuse me --- "autobiology"??
Did you mean "(auto)biography"?

Re: Please Help Me [by ]

Fri, 13 Jul 2007 23:12:09 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: Please Help Me
Hi Aspirant

Trading compliments with you, my son expresses praise and admiration for your entry into The University of Chicago. He sends his regards and best wishes, in which I join him.

To your “EURO” question, perhaps it may be termed the ‘Euro Creep’. Try the internet to see if you can find any answers.

Cheers.

Re: How to write an "English resume" [by ginny]

Fri, 8 Jun 2007 00:13:21 +0800

Writing Correction (修改英文作文,自傳,履歷,信件):: How to write an "English resume"
Please write following items in your resume.
1. English name (including your romanize name & English name)
2. Current Address
3. Phone number (including your cell phone & home telephone numbers)
4. E-mail
5. Education background
6. Language & Computer skills or other skills (including license)
7. work experiences
8. interests

That's all. Hope it can help you.