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In Taiwan, the Most However, when enjoying the convenience, we We all know that every coin has two sides and the issue in question is no exception. So, in my opinion, as long as we face these shortcomings squarely Remarks: 1) "By driving cars, we can..."指的是我們自己開車, 而"door-to-door service"是商家所提供, 與我們自己開車何干? 故我幫你把這兩件事分開. 2) 三個獨立的句子不可直接以逗號連接, 而要以子句型態"that..., that..., and that..."來連接. 3) are injured是被動語態, die是主動語態, 直接連接較不好, 故改為"are injured or even killed". 4) 最後一段中, 你以"As long as..."開頭構建一個長句, 主要子句是"owning a car is really not a bad thing for us", 而"As ong as"所帶領的全部是附屬子句, 中間不可有分號";", 也不可在主要子句之前另行插入"In this way"另起新句, 使得"As long as......traffice rules, etc."變成了不成句的孤兒. 5) 在(4)之中, 因為你先前提到三件事, 所以解決方案也要依次有三項才完整, 因此我幫你添加了一項內容.
Posted on: 2007/4/20 17:33
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Hmmm...Igot it.. ^ ^
they are directly written through the senses so many details is easily neglected so that my article always is full of loopholes but now I am very cheerful to feel that seemingly I make progress gradually because of these alterations Thank you very much
Posted on: 2007/4/21 20:02
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